Rewriting a paragraph from my comparitive essay using TWIRLS.

Angelou then uses quotes such as 'Rain on me, rain,' 'cool my brow again' and 'let me rest tonight' in the next three stanzas with a pleading tone, as thought she is pleading with the elements. This is personification, implying that the woman has nowhere else to turn, and nobody to talk to, yet she still has hope. It uses a steady rythm, bringing us to the tough reality of the situation. During this, Angelou uses alot of repitition, for example 'Shine on me, sunshine,' insinuating that she is desperate and refuses to give up. In Overheard in County Sligo, Clarke uses personification to compare the woman to the 'square of yellow corn/ caught up by its corners and shaken' -whereas Woman Work starts off much more strightforward, listing the chores to show how much impact the work alone has on us- which also implies vunerability in her character, as corn is quite delicate and helpless. This quote also uses little punctation, in this case making it slower and making it have more impact on you.